Thursday, May 14, 2015

Month 2: Pages 3-5

I normally write these piece-meal throughout the month, but on the 10th, I lost everything I'd written (aside from the translation itself, which I hand-write and then type up), so this is reconstructed from what I remember (haply, in re-writing one of the points of commentary, I realized that it was ill-founded, so there was that benefit).

At the beginning of the month, I effected a slight change in my procedure.  I'd been translating a sentence everyday, but since German sentences have a tendency to be rather long, I decided to start splitting them up into their constituent clauses if there's a colon or semi-colon.  Eventually, I started doing this with dialogue and speech tags too, if the speech tags were lengthy.

Here's what I translated this month (as usual, italicized sections are things I'm unsure about):

And that is good; the permanently-at-home and native woman who is rooted in the home and active in it is for me the strongest and most efficient.  We are glad that our youthful hostess found here in her beautiful, East Prussian home, which for a series of years I have also been proud and happy to call mine, a field of rich efficacy and abundance-bringing work on the clod of her ancestors.  That she have her activity fulfilled - this that survives her together in those lucky narrow and width, as she fulfilled them to the welfare of her father, his righteous girl, and all people who work in Reckenstein, until now with her sense full of the joys of life: that is my wish for her birthdays.  Then I ask you to raise your glasses with me and let them crash in a cheerful and strong huzzah for Miss Edith von Barrnhoff!” 
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  “Huzzah, huzzah, huzzah!” it rang from against the company at the table.  But it was a dull, almost distracted echo.  Before the last saying of the speakers had found no more attention, a different sound had mixed itself into them, first from the distance, then coming closer and closer:  the sound of horseshoes, that hit the road of the approach with a hurrying trot, and now - “That is really the limit!” shouted the Reckenstein citizen and with his face burning with anger jumped up from his chair.  “They’re riding in my garden!”
  “In our garden?” Edith now also asked.  “That is outrageous!”
  But before she or her father could step out into the open, over the small thorn-hedge, placed to separate the garden from the yard, in a short gallop, two horsemen in the smart officer’s uniform of the cuirassiers had galloped over the path, raked with more special care in honor of the present day, and suddenly stopped the horses, dropping with sweat, directly in front of the wood steps that lead up to the garden veranda.  And still not enough, now with some doing they forced the well-practiced horses up the small steps, and before the society - who had without exception risen from the cosy evening table, recovered from their astonishment - they stood with their horses up on the veranda.  “Huzzah, huzzah, huzzah!” they shouted, with the right arm raised, ten times as powerful than even the whole table company had first managed it, and once again: “Huzzah for the birthday girl!”
  That all was the work of a moment; it had some so quickly and unexpectedly that no one knew how it actually happened and what this inexplicable invasion was supposed to mean. 
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  “Fritz Warsow!” one heard Edith’s bright voice then, and, bursting out in a merry, happy laugh, she held out her hand toward one of the two riders.  That one had already dismounted, greeted, and returned her heartfelt handshakes.  Then he walked up to the old Reckenstein citizen:  “Pardon this ambush, major, but I had to win my wager.  And allow me to introduce to you and to the ladies and gentlemen, my comrade, Mr. von Uechteritz, who has accompanied me as a flawless witness and to whom I have often praised your hospitality.”
  That one also had long since gotten out of the saddle; a stable boy, who came running up, received the steaming horses and led them into the stable.  “However able to run down and to feed well, they have achieved something!” Fritz Warsow shouted after him and proceeded with his comrade to a room to let, in order to prepare himself for the table after the difficult ride.
  Very soon they turned back and took the places cleared away for them, Mr. von Uechteritz between the two orphaned owner’s daughters, Fritz Warsow between Edith and Mrs. Stoltzmann.
  “But your wager, captain!” shouted the Reckenstein citizen from the opposite side of the table.  “Edith never told me a word about it.”

Fun German words and phrases I found (or at least those that I remember finding) while looking up other words:

  • der Rösselsprung - knight’s move [in chess]
  • der I-Punkt - dot over the i; bis auf den ~ - down to the last detail
  • man kann nicht auf zwei Hochzeiten tanzen - you can’t be in more than once place at the same time [literally: one can’t dance at two weddings]
  • kreiseln - to play with a top; to spin around [I found it interesting how this relates to der Kreis - circle]

In the English section of my German-English dictionary, I ran across setaceous, which I didn’t know.  It means “set with or consisting of bristles”.  In German, borstig.
Also while in the English section, I discovered that in German rumrunner is das Alkoholschmuggler, which is not as much fun to say.

The mayor forces himself into the middle of his compliment to Edith.  Between “her beautiful, East Prussian home” and “a field of rich efficacy,” he adds his own claim that “for a series of years I have also been proud and happy to call [it] mine.”  It reminded me of Claudius’ speech in Hamlet when he announces his marriage to Gertrude:
Therefore our sometime sister, now our Queen,
Th' imperial jointress to this warlike state,
Have we--as 'twere with a defeated joy,
With an auspicious and a dropping eye,
With mirth in funeral and with dole in marriage,
In equal scale weighing delight and dole--
Taken to wife. (I.ii.8-14)
David Scott Kastan points out in "Words, Words, Words: Understanding Shakespeare's Language,” which is in most (if not all) of the Barnes & Noble editions of Shakespeare’s plays, that Claudius’ weird syntax demonstrates his discomfort.  He doesn’t just say, “Our sometime sister… have we… taken to wife,” he goes on various tangents.  I haven’t gotten far enough in Heimat yet to know the characters that well, but it seems like the mayor is doing a similar thing here: sticking himself into his compliment.  Once I understand the characters more clearly, I might be able to shape their syntax to reflect their aims and personalities.

I’m confused by “zu ihrem Geburtstage.”  “Zu ihrem” indicates that this is masculine and dative, but the “-e” ending of “Geburtstage” is indicative of a plural, which would change “ihrem” to “ihren.”  This is all assuming that I’ve read the charts correctly (and remember my point correctly).  I ran into a similar situation with “Hurra dem Geburtstagskinde!”  I can’t make sense of that “-e” ending either.  The singular is Geburtstagskind; the plural Geburtstagskinder.

I translated “Hurra” as huzzah.  Huzzah wasn’t listed as a translation in the German section of my English-German dictionary (it gave only hooray), but working from the English section, both hooray and huzzah redirect to hurrah, which they translate as Hurra, so it all works out.

I found a missing quotation mark on page 4.  Der Reckensteiner (I’ve been translating this as “the Reckenstein citizen,” which I’m not sure is the best translation) shouts, “In meinen Garten reiten sie!” but there’s no quotation mark preceding his dialogue.  I’ve encountered this in other books, but it’s weird to see that it happened even in 1916.

“Was dieser unbegreifliche Einfall bedeuten sollte” had me confused for awhile because I couldn’t think of a way to put should (sollen) in past tense.  At first, I tried “what this inexplicable invasion should have meant,” but then I realized that that was putting the infinitive (“bedeuten”) in past tense instead of “sollte” (also, that was present perfect instead of simple past).  I put that part of the sentence through Google Translate (which I’ve been using only as a last resort), and it suggested “supposed to” instead of “should.”  And “supposed to” is much easier to put in past tense (“was supposed to”).  I’m not even sure now if there is a past tense of “should” in English.

I’m not sure if I was surprised by it, but I still found it interesting that in German, bright can be used metaphorically, in addition to purely visual things.  This appears in the description of “Ediths helle Stimme” ("Edith’s bright voice").  I wouldn’t think twice about such an application in English, but I felt I’d better check it in the German.

I had a lot of problems with “ein herbeigeeilter Knecht,” specifically “herbeigeeilter.”  (It was while writing about this point that I lost almost a month’s work of commentary, too.)  It’s a participle from herbeieilen (“to come running up”), but it’s in past tense (herbegeeilt).  The “-er” at the end is there because Knecht is a masculine word preceded by an article (a der word with “ein” in front of it).  I can’t figure out a way to make “to come running up” into a past tense participle though.  At first, I just made it a verb and made the other verbs in the sentence infinitives, but then I realized that I could put “herbegeeilter” in a relative clause (“who came running up”), which preserves the adjectival function of the participle.  So, instead of my original “a stable boy came running up to receive the steaming horses and lead them into the stable,” I now have “a stable boy, who came running up, received the steaming horses and led them into the stable.”  It’s better, but I’m still not completely satisfied with it.  Hopefully, I’ll come back to it later with a solution.

Tuesday, April 14, 2015

Month 1: Pages 1-3

I plan on writing a post like this every month (on the 14th) to document my progress and mention any interesting lingual things I might have run across.  It'll be like a serialization but of translation rather than of writing.  Here's what I've translated so far (the parts I'm unsure about [there are a lot, and even some of the other sections could probably be phrased better; I'm planning on refining things once I get through a first draft of translation] are in italics and "---&---" indicates page breaks, accompanied by a page number if there is one):

Who Loves the Home as You
Novel by Artur Brausewetter 
Twenty-sixth through Thirtieth Thousand 
Publishing house of Georg Westermann
Brunswick - Berlin - Hamburg 
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Copyright 1916 by Georg Westermann Brunswick
From the bill literal prescribed formula 

Printing by Georg Westermann in Brunswick 
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Dedicated in gratitude and admiration to the savior of East Prussia General-Fieldmarshall von Hindenburg 
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     What had not happened for a long time in Reckenstein happened today: someone was having a party.  Edith the only daughter of the old Reckenstein citizen, who for five years had with circumspection and loyalty replaced his early departed wife for him in house and yard, began her twenty-first birthday.  The Reckenstein citizen had never been for having the party; for him life’s sense and happiness lay in his monotony.  This time he made an exception; it was from him that the suggestion for this celebration came.
     Small was the circle of the invited: from the neighborhood, Harro von Ubitzsch, lean, serious aloof, with a small wife who delighted in empty chatter; from farther away, Dr. Werner Stoltzmann, the first mayor of Rodenburg, who had been city treasurer for a short time in Königsberg, and who had - for their blossoming city and not easy administration - won the Rodenburg city council to count on him with pride to action.  He was still young and of outspoken talent, one whose consciousness of himself was - for one in his thirty-fourth year - stamped very surely in character and appearance, which for him would be laid out from some sides as arrogance and self-importance.  However, those who knew him more closely, like the Reckenstein citizen and his daughter, knew that at heart he was humble and modest.  But the life and the great publicity, in this it was tasked to him so early, to have liked to have taught him, that in this world with such virtues, not many were to begin.  His wife showed the compensating opposite, a tall brunette with red, round, 
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soft cheeks; laughing eyes; and a boldly-made nose with very thin, finely-drawn wings that - when she spoke - quietly shook.  Coming from an old Rhenish officer’s family, Frau Lisa quickly settled herself by virtue of excellent upbringing into the stiffer north German relations, and through her natural, warm-hearted nature, quickly won the hearts of all the Rodenburg citizens and also the hearts of those who were still temporarily faced with deferring to their husbands.
     Edith, more serious but as life-affirming as she, was tightly befriended to her of a Genevan pension year; now the contact, when she found herself here again one day, would preferably maintain, although one had a three-hour railroad journey to Reckenstein and both men appear further separated through the differences of age and attitude.
     For the early season the day had been exceptionally hot.  When one settled one’s self to supper in the large dining room, the windows and both wings of the old oak doors that led out to the garden veranda remain opened.  Although the darkness had not yet arrived, one had lit the candles on the enormous silver candelabra that - inherited from the ancestors - belonged to the most beautiful pieces of the Reckenstein house-treasure.  In the mild draft the flickering light grasped her there with long fingers over the spring flowers that - stunning and fragrant - adorned the table.  However, the gradually duller and twilight-still becoming evening light pierced the windows and the door.  And if the conversation once fell silent, one heard from outside the song of a nightingale in wonderful tones, one minute jubilant, the next sighing. 
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     But now it broke off, from a loud sound that shrilly cut off his soft melodies, brought to silence.  Dr. Stoltzmann had knocked on his glass and rose to his feet.
     “Ladies and gentlemen,” he began in his somewhat hard - but not sparing melodiousness - way of speaking, “You know that I am more a man of objective language than of well-cut table-aphorisms.  However, the friendly position that we took up for our host - and particularly my wife took up for the daughter of his house - drives me today together in her name to offer up our congratulations to Miss Edith in this circle of chosen friends.  It is the day on which she” - he took an approach to be humorous, something at which he never particularly succeeded - “steps out of her children’s shoes and will be received under the adults.  This event will change little in her external life-relationships.

Fun German words I came across by happenstance while looking up other words:
  • verprügeln - to beat someone up
    While cross checking candelabrum (der Armleuchter) I ran across baste in the English section of my German-English dictionary, and apparently verprügeln also means to baste
    And while reading a book about Mendelssohn (R. Larry Todd's Mendelssohn: A Life in Music), I ran across Musikantenprügelei a "humorous part-song" Mendelssohn wrote.  I'm not sure of the origin of the given English translation: "Musicians' Fisticuffs," but - while I hate the word fisticuffs - it does agree with what my German-English dictionary gives me: "brawl, scrap, free-for-all"
  • der Liliputaner - dwarf, midget
    Apparently in reference to Jonathan Swift's Gulliver's Travels
  • (wie) im Fluge - [idiomatically:] quickly [but literally:] as in flight
  • uzen - to pull someone's leg [as a noun: die Uzerei]
  • die Schwachkopf - blockhead [but literally "weak head"]
  • der Klimbim - to-do; rubbish; der ganze ~ - the whole caboodle

I was a bit befuddled by "einer... Nase mit... Flügeln."  I translated it as "a... nose with... wings," which didn't make sense at first, but then I looked it up.  Apparently nose wings are a thing even in English.  I'd never heard of this, so it was weird to learn about it via German.

While looking up hinausführenden (leading out [or led out?]), I noticed die Hexe (witch), and discovered that it's connected etymologically with the English word hex.  I either discovered or re-discovered die Hexerei (witchcraft), which I found interesting because it follows the same paradigm as die Bäckerei (bakery), die Brauerei (brewery), die Metzgerei (butcher shop), and probably some others.

And while confirming Brauerei for that comment above, I ran across die Brause (shower).  Along with das Wetter (weather), I think this provides the author's surname (Brausewetter).

I couldn't find a direct translation for Hausschatzes, but since Haus is house and Schatz (in genitive case here) is treasure, I translated it as house-treasure.  Then it occurred to me that a lot of the German compound words (and I suppose English ones too) are sort of akin to Old English kennings (I've been reading Beowulf lately, so I've encountered a lot of them).

"Bald jauchzenden, bald schluchzenden" looked sort of confusing when I was copying it out, but in translating it and looking up bald, I discovered that "bald... bald..." is a correlative ("one minute... the next...").  I was going to verify this with my German textbook, but it turns out that neither of my collegiate German textbooks has anything about correlatives in the indices.  Running into jauchzenden (jubilant) was coincidental as it appeared in the title of a Bach cantata I'd listened to a few days earlier (albeit as an imperative: Jauchzet Gott in allen Landen, BWV 51 ["Praise God in all lands"]).

Friday, March 27, 2015

Introduction

About two weeks ago (on the 14th), I started a project I'd been meaning to get to for a long time: translating a German novel.


I obtained a copy of Artur Brausewetter's Wer die Heimat liebt wie du (published in 1916) from my grandfather's basement after he died at the end of 2008.  Later, I found a .PDF of the book on the Internet Archive, and when I was in university (and had access to virtually free paper), I printed a second copy.  For about two years, it'd just been sitting around, so I decided to finally get around to translating it - at the rate of one sentence per day.


I'm not particularly qualified to translate a German novel.  I took German classes through all four years of high school and two semesters of university (my first semester in 2010 and my last semester in 2014), and while I did well in my German classes, that's about as far as I went with it academically.

But I've graduated and am currently unemployed with not many prospects, so I figured I don't have much to lose.